My Grant Proposal....Part Uno

Dear Sir or Madam,
Hello my name is Anthony Dobrini from Stony Brook University in Long Island, New York. I am inquiring about your grant in regards to a film I am doing for my Media and Film class. My professor and a group of students have come up with a whole grant group to find how to reach out for assistance when making out films. After searching on cos.com I came across your grant information and it seemed like something that could work with my film.
My premise is following the idea of education here on this campus as along with most other universities dealing with what society wants us to take out of it our education beyond the classroom. Originally universities were monasteries for us (just buildings that became place of learning) but then suddenly changed to a factory - where we were produced purposely to learn information. But now, the lifestyle aspect of campus is very important. However, many students tend to go home to mom and dad as soon as the weekend hits. So are we taking living on campus and our outside learning for granted? Here at SBU we are so closely associated with the NY transportation system, thousands of students go home on the weekends. I have an interesting idea with taking the different eras of education and how it will affect us as we enter the workforce.

Now I need to change a lot of things in that ....so I am going to work on that tomorrow. I will post a brand new update with what it should come out like. I got some good ideas from Curtis in class. Siiiiick!